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I've been having doubts about my writing lately so I kinda wanted to post something to get feedback from you guys. Problem is, all of my texts so far are in Swedish, so I tried writing something up in english for a change, and see how that would go. These texts all belong in a series and a universe I have no name for yet, but the premise, I suppose, is similar to Zootopia, although I started writing way back in 2011-2012. It's a dystopian cyberpunk world inhabited entirely by reptiles, and, well, hijinks ensue. I think of it as for young adults but most YA literature is so... clean, bland. This text I wrote today is a test of sorts, a hypothetical first chapter of a novel that I like to call "The Bubble that Burst". I dunno if I'll use this for anything though, this was merely written so I can have critique on it. So here we go. PLEASE give some honest critique and let me know what I can improve on here. I wrote this for a reason, I feel like my writing lately has gotten worse rather than better, so I kinda want some confirmation on if it really is bad or if it's just low self-esteem. Don't be afraid to tell me anything.