Nekokami Posted March 3, 2016 Share Posted March 3, 2016 So I recently started writing a story called Lok's Clichéd Adventure, a sort of parody of fantasy adventure stories. Here it is, with new chapters whenever I stop lazing around and write them: http://w.tt/1WSztjQ Feel free to critique it, but please don't be too rough, as it's my first time. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conker Posted March 4, 2016 Share Posted March 4, 2016 Requiring me to make an account to read it all. Read a little bit. That first joke about the name is cute, but you run it into the ground by going on too long, I think. Too early to really comment on anything else. If this is your first real attempt at writing though, you're starting off better than quite a few people. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nekokami Posted March 4, 2016 Author Share Posted March 4, 2016 21 hours ago, Conker said: Requiring me to make an account to read it all. Read a little bit. That first joke about the name is cute, but you run it into the ground by going on too long, I think. Too early to really comment on anything else. If this is your first real attempt at writing though, you're starting off better than quite a few people. I didn't know you needed an account to read it all... Huh. Yeah, this is my first proper attempt, so it's not really gonna be particularly good. I'll learn as I go. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Conker Posted March 5, 2016 Share Posted March 5, 2016 6 hours ago, Nekokami said: I didn't know you needed an account to read it all... Huh. Yeah, this is my first proper attempt, so it's not really gonna be particularly good. I'll learn as I go. If you want to toss it on a google doc or something, I'll make sure to read it all. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nekokami Posted March 5, 2016 Author Share Posted March 5, 2016 10 hours ago, Conker said: If you want to toss it on a google doc or something, I'll make sure to read it all. Sure, I'll do that as soon as I can. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nekokami Posted March 7, 2016 Author Share Posted March 7, 2016 (edited) On Saturday, March 05, 2016 at 5:21 AM, Conker said: If you want to toss it on a google doc or something, I'll make sure to read it all. Wow, I took ages to do this. Anyway, I forgot I had it on deviantart too, so here: http://senpai-88.deviantart.com/art/Lok-s-Cliched-Adventure-Chapters-P-4-594001788 Edited March 7, 2016 by Nekokami Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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