Feelwell Posted April 5, 2016 Share Posted April 5, 2016 Alright so, I don't typically search out feedback, because honestly freely writing, creatively, doesn't come up, ever. So I resolved to write more often. Either way I designed a bit of a, scene, I suppose, and I'd love to hear thoughts, criticisms, suggestions, etc. Please be honest. Writing is below. "James eased further back onto the bench, happy to finally relax. After all the work, the trials and tribulations, the fear and sadness, the hatred, the anger, it was over. The sun had just began to peek over the hills, banishing the dark and ushering in a brighter day. He smiled at the aptness of the analogy. He looked out over the piles of rubble, what used to be homes and places of work, and winced inwardly. There was always a price for change, no matter what. However, people were already starting to rebuild, and new life was sprouting everywhere. He felt they had done the right thing, and the ends justified the means. The leaves above him rustled quietly, as if in agreement with his conclusion. As the dawn’s light continued to spread, illuminating the scene, his certainty grew. James felt the doubt he had felt for so long lift from his shoulders. They had finally succeeded. This scene truly marked the dawn, of a new age." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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